Wednesday, October 17, 2007

Revised Story

Enter a world with nothing but black, white, and shades of gray. The world is colorless and, in turn, almost completely lifeless. There are inhabitants though, and they all always stick together to support each other and hold tight to the little amount of life they have. The inhabitants are glass creatures, and they take many different forms. Some of them are artistically formed and sculpted into their current shape, others form from bits of broken glass, but what is important is that they all stick together and form a close-knit community. They do this by coming together in the middle of a barren field in a sculpture-like formation that mocks that of the individually sculpted pieces of glass. This sculpture is surrounded by rocks below to protect from invadors and those wanting to cause harm to the tightly-bound glass creature family. On one side of the sculpture lies a river, protecting the glass creatures from city-dwellers on the opposide side, and on the other side is a mountain range, providing even more protection. Inside the city there is violence and desperation, it is no place for a glass creature to want to live. When a glass creature is born here, the only choice he has is to get out and join his peers as quickly as he possibly can. That is where our story begins. A rock is thrown and hits a window of a building on the edge of the city limits, and the glass shatters and falls to the ground. From these bits of shattered glass a small and fragile-looking glass creature is formed. He can see the violence around him and also the glass sculpture out across the field, and right away he knows that he is to go to the sculpture and join the others. This is not necessarily what he wants to do right away because he wants to live life his own way and be an individual, but he knows he will be more help to the other glass creatures if he joins them. He begins his journey, travelling to the edge of town and beginning across the field. When he reaches the river, he feels as if he has met a great enemy, seeing as how the glass creatures don't like water. He must find a way across the river because he can't let it keep him from reaching his peers across the field. He is eventually able to find a wooden plank to place across some stones and, after a few tries, he makes it safely to the other side of the river. During this attempt to cross the river, the creature loses a few shards of his glass-being, and he feels almost incomplete, but he knows he must keep going towards the sculpture because it is nearly sunset, and there is no way for him to function after dark in a black and white world. He continues on with every strength of his being. When he reaches the rocks below the sculpture, he knows that all he will have to do is climb up them and find the perfect place to rest himself among his peers. The climb up the rocks is treacherous, but he finally reaches the top of the rocks and begins climbing his peers to find a place for himself among them. The sun is nearly setting, and the glass creature thinks he cannot reach his destination before it does set, but he finally finds his place with some direction from his peers. Just as the sun is setting, he places himself at the perfect location, and, without the glass shard that he thought he needed, the sun catches him at just the right angle to create a prism. The prism floods the world with color and life almost instantaneously. The creature has given new life and color to his world just in time for the beautiful sunset to be viewed by all the glass creatures.

3 comments:

Brittany said...

I think the most important part of your story is to show that desire and need to reach this sculpture. What kind of task are they accomplishing by joining together to make this sculpture. Because they were a tight community in the beginning, the "coming together" does not make complete sense. I think if you show the war and violence going on in the beginning with a lack of community, and then somehow they convince themselves to form this sculpture to get rid of the violence, and it does, that might make a little bit more sense.

Joshua said...

Well first thing that i noticed was the idea that you said of this being a lifeless area, yet you have a TOWn, Mountian rang, and RIVER. It would be hard to display lifelessness with a town.

Secondly, I do like the end result in your story but, You have alot of diferent emotions that take place with in your stroy, and i feel it might be a little hard on you to display all these emotions coming fromm a glass creature. Keep that in mind.

Third, i am not aware of your animation experiance, but you seem to have alot of people/thing involved in your stroy. Keep in mind that will cause for ALOT of animation. Just be mindfull of this when starting to animate. Consider every which way you make go in order to make things as easy for you as possible. Also, real looking water is hard to do. Maya does have a tool for that, but it is very "robotic" looking water, and takes alot of tweeking to perfect. That too will effect you animation time. Not to mention render time too. So will Mental ray rendering for your light effects

All-in-all, if you pull this all off, i really do like the theme of your story. I can already begin to visualize this animation. Just keep ontop of your animation/render time and everything should be alright.

kaniz bokhari said...

The main object of this character is to live and be safe in the dificult times but the problem is it is not safe,and wants to go where it is safe. One thing i want to say,that does this character know how much it can be dangrous for others because it is sharp and uneven think about the possiblelities .